Mina Karimi, 10B
A pressing issue in Haiti continues to be infant, child, and maternal mortality .The infant mortality rate in Haiti is nine times higher than the US and maternal mortality rate is fifty times as high.
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What
about the doctors? Well like I stated earlier they were too poor and the
doctors often charged too much for them to pay so they had to go with their
lives without medical attention. In the book Mountains Beyond Mountains by
Tracy Kidder, Paul Farmer a man who dedicates his life to
helping people get
better, is describing a patient that came into the clinic in Haiti when he was
younger and it was one of his earlier experiences in Haiti. He says ”Later on
that night a young woman arrived at the hospital, pregnant and in the throes of
malaria.” She was too poor to afford a blood transfusion and as a result her
unborn child died along with her leaving her five children at home not knowing
that they would never see their mother alive again. Her sister sobs and cries
telling Farmer “ This is terrible. You can’t even get a blood transfusion if
you're poor. ’ She sobbed ‘We’re all human beings.”(Kidder, 80). This comment
is a very empowering quote. Everyone is a human and they all deserve to be
treated so why are there those who are not treated the same? Why do those with
less money than others get treated worse and do not recive the things they
need? Why don’t we help them get what they need? This way more people will live
and the mother in the quote would not have died and her unborn child would most
likely not have die. If we help Haitians get health care and these simple
necessities we can save so many lives and her children would still have their
mother. They would still have the mother they love, the woman who cares for
them and sees that they are safe and sound. Since the basic right to health
care is being denied to these Haitians because of the corrupt government and
the fact that all of them were too poor so many people are needlessly dying of
things that can be cured, things they don’t have to die for. If we help by
providing healthcare, clean drinking water, and simple necessities less mothers
and infants will die during childbirth and the children can get better instead
of worse and go back to running around outside like a health child once again.
Even if healthcare is given it is important to provide everyday necessity
because in the book Mountains Beyond Mountains Dr. Farmer did a study on
the importance of them and discovered that those who received these necessities
are more likely to get better and stay healthier .To help lower infant, child,
and maternal mortality health care, clean water, and everyday necessities are
what is needed to be given to them .We have the ability to provide these things
to Haitians and help them until they no longer need our help. We can give them
supplies, build pipes for clean water, set up a beneficial health care, and if
you can’t do that simply donate money. This will help the people in the end and
our morals as humans obligate us to not let someone die when we can help save
it. We can help save a life and make a difference. It doesn’t take much but a
simple action to start a chain of reactions that will end up benefiting and
helping someone in Haiti.
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I like the constant facts shown throughout this Op-Ed. It really helped me realize who is at fault, the governement. But to tug my heart a little I would have like to see more pathos. But you did have A TON of logos and ethos!!!
ReplyDeleteI like how you bring the idea that one group of people are treated better than the other because of the lack of money. This can really break someone's heart. I am reading the same book as you right now and you did a great job connecting it to the story and really convinced me that you care about this topic. Your Logos are really good.
ReplyDeleteI thought this was a well written op-ed. You brought up a lot of good evidence on your topic that would help people who want to know more about this topic. I felt like you lacked a little in logos but you expressed what you needed to. It was enlightening to learn of all the tragedies Haiti faces especially outside of the recent earthquake they experienced.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you talked about how the government was corrupt and it is their fault this is still an issue. I also like how you started with good ethos.
ReplyDeleteThe emotion that you put in this op-ed really stood out to me and made me feel in the moment.Your evidence was on point and correct. I was really convinced that this was an important topic to you.
ReplyDeletei like how you start some of the paragraphs. really strong. you have a really strong paragraph on the book, but how about the actual conflict? i think you can add more statistics and ways this conflict can be solved
ReplyDeleteYour logos are really good and you show a lot of facts and evidance as well as your ethos some of the things you said really touched me.
ReplyDeleteYour pathos stood out to me. The emotions really did get to me as I read your op-ed. Though I think your first paragraph are repetitive because it kept mentioning about children. You gave a lot of information about the book and the quotes you pulled out from the book made your op-ed stronger.
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