Naqash Ashraf
Photo From NY Times |
Women
in Afghanistan aren't as lucky as the women that live in our country.
The women in Afghanistan are under the government's authority at all
times. But when the Taliban had took over Afghanistan then things got
way worse. They were under control about 95 percent of the time. Three
hundred women in Kabul demanded the repeal of a Taliban-like law that
permits, among other things, marital rape. They were tired of
everything. For example the women in Afghanistan stated “We want our
rights!” one of the women shouted, turning to face them. “We want
equality!”
The
Taliban had basically took the women's lives away and made them drop
everything. They made them stop attending school, stop going to work and
stop being themselves. Basically the women were so controlled that they
could not show themselves, they could not go out if they wanted, they
could not show any skin because they had to be covered at all times. If
the women disobeyed any of these rules they would most likely get beaten
and maybe sometimes be killed. Also most importantly they could not
dare talk to another man other than their husband
Picture from Afghan women News |
worse
everyday for them. Everyday that the women are banned from work, that
means that they don’t have money to support their family and that's why
tons of people in Afghanistan are in poverty and dieing.
Poverty was in a big concern in Afghanistan because most of the women
couldn't feed their kids and their husbands and some would die of
starvation.An Article had stated that “Afghanistan
is one of the poorest countries in the world.” Also the children that
were ill would die because hospitals where to expensive and some weren't
open because of Unemployment women. About 80 percent of the women in
Afghanistan's have horrible lives because of the messed up government.
A book that I'm reading in humanities is just like the suffering of women in Afghanistan. It is called The dressmaker of Khair Khana,
by Gayle lemmon. The book is about a girl named Kamila who is also
struggling a lot from the Government. Everyday Kamila is in life
struggling situations like many of the women, but she is one of the few
lucky women who was very brave and fought hard even when there wasn't
any man in the family. She will do everything she can to fight for her
family and her life.
I
believe that we can make a change and help these women in poverty. SO
many women are struggling and that is not right at all. They should be
treated all equally and not judged and controlled by the Taliban
Government. Some things we can do are
- Donate Money to Families
- Donate foods for the starving women and children
- Let people know
- Protest
Anything
can help these people in need, so please lookout and try to help and
always remember how lucky you are and be grateful of what you have.
I felt that you have information on whats happening to women in Afghanistan but failed to mention the effects of abuse on them. I would like to see more of this in your op-ed
ReplyDeleteYou use very appealing information to support your argument but make sure your tone throughout your whole op-ed is professional because you want to make sure you feel confident about your topic. Also make sure you use the right form of "there, their" because I feel like I found that mistake in your second body paragraph. I love the pictures you chose because they are very strong images on what affect your topic had on women, maybe explain how it stopped women from 'being themselves' because that sounds a little vague.
ReplyDeleteVery good Op-ed so far Naqash. You use a lot of pathos and when reading this op-ed the reader will most likely feel something because the pathos you use is very strong. However you should probably add some facts and tell us the background of the Taliban a bit.
ReplyDeleteYou provide a lot of information on your topic and your information engaged me. The only thing you are lacking is use of logos. I feel that if you had added facts or statistics your Op-Ed could be a lot stronger. Good start though.
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